In modern society the competition exist everywhere, such as in doing business, in looking for job and in working in office. Therefore it affect our life and thought at different level and also children’s education. Parents hope their children will live in better status in their future. So they want to train their children suitable for the modern society. I agree to encourage children to do more competitive sport.
How to educate children is difficult and complicated question to answer. There are a lot of theories we can find. But every parent has his own and different solution. There is not standard result. Some of parents may say that children should be educated earlier. However others do not agree. Earlier controlling young children’s behavior will stifle their intelligence. I think we should properly guide your children to our social standard.
Time is justice for human. Everybody enjoys the same time, twenty four hours per day. Therefore managing time on career and family is skillful. It resembles balance which holds career and family at its two sides. Problem will happen if imbalance occurs. If more time is spent on career, it will result in less time on family. it means that people has less time to stay with family, less time to take care of children and partner. He will maybe lose their love and happiness. The marriage will be probably broken. Oppositely, position will be not promoted easily.
With the recent ten years global economy growing rapidly, more and more people become rich and have time to go out for travel, abroad or domestically. Meanwhile it is also causing some troubles and problems meanwhilethough it brings contribution to GDP partially. Because I read an article about the number of international travel which is going down. I think that it is a good news.
上面的段落中其实第一处的“meanwhile”使用并没有太大问题，问题出在紧接着的第二个“meanwhile”上，作者想当然的将其作为“and”的功能使用了，而且在它后面他又加了一个连接词“though”，这样一来整个意思就完全错误了。尽管句子中还有其他一些小问题，但是就这2个连词的使用上，若作者再仔细考虑下所要表达的意思，就不会犯这样的低级错误了。正确的写法应该为：“Meanwhile, it has also caused some troubles and problems though it may contribute to a country’s GDP to some degree.”在选择和使用连词时，我们要遵循的原则首先是句子的中文意思，根据相邻两个句子的意思才能准确做出选择；其次是灵活原则，同一个意思的连接词有很多，而且有些词后面接的是句子，而有些词接的是词组，如果需要连续使用同一个意思，那么就要换不同的连词；最后我们还要注意在使用连词时尽量保证一个段落中不要有同样的一个连词重复使用，这样可以增加词汇表达的多样性。接下来我们再来看一个段落：
First reason is that more and more people move into cities. It causes no much space in the cities to do physical exercise. Secondary, the usage of computer and internet causes people to stay home and not willing to go out.Furthermore, due to working pressure, people, especially white collars, do not have vigour to do physical exercise. In addition, the tertiary industry is developing and more and more people work in office, not at workshop. It causes them less labour work
My view is that after more and more people moved into cities, a lot of buildings set up and occupied green areas. It has caused the space for physical exercise to become smaller and smaller. For example, the population of Shanghai was 13 millions ten years ago, but now it is more than 20 millions. Skyscrapers build almost everywhere, which has resulted in parks smaller and numbers declined.
这个段落中其他的语法错误暂时先不说，我们来看一下划线的2处用法。按照作者的意图，第一句话的含义应该是说“人们造了很多建筑从而占据了绿地”这个意思，而他所选择的句子主语是“建筑”。因此后面的动词就只能使用被动语态来表达，并且时态建议使用现在完成时。所以第一处应该改为“…buildings have been set up…”；而第二处地方作者犯了同样的错误，由于“摩天大楼”自己不会“建造”，必须是靠人来完成，所以此处也应该使用被动语态而非主动态表达：“Skyscrapers are being built…or Skyscrapers can be seen…”。归根结底，我们在写一个句子时，要特别注意对句子主语的选择，合理的主语安排对于一个好的句子来说是非常重要的，同时也决定了这个句子的语态。一般来说，笔者建议考生将重要的意思放在主语位置上，而不要将其放在状语或者从句中。
Firstly, people can educate the benefits of physical exercise. It can increase physical and mental health and decrease the rate of “modern diseases”. For example, we could find more and more people to walk for physical exercise at residential district in the evening due to recent health education. Secondly, policies need to make to ask public schools to open their sports ground to public at weekend.
这个段落中我们同样看到了2处语态使用的错误，其实倘若作者重新安排下句子的主语的话，就可以避免此类错误的产生，比如第2处我们完全可以用“政府”作为句子的主语：“Our government should make policies…”这样就能很好地解决这个问题；另外，第一处的错误我们也同样可以将原来的主语“we”变成“mass media”等即可。
Firstly, as more and more visitors crowded into scenic sports, such as beach, lakes, it has caused severe pollution. Especially when the tourists were not educated well, throw rubbish everywhere thought the cleaners at tourist attraction would collect them. For example, just last public holiday during national day, it was reported that the weight of rubbish collect reached thousands of tons at beach in SanYa after holiday.
其实我们看到这个学生的语法能力不算很弱，他在论述时使用了不同类型的复杂句，如条件状语从句和主语从句，但是可惜的是划线2处他没有很好处理动词的数量，并且由于主语成分的缺失，导致第一个地方的主句没有了主语，而却出现了2个时态不一样的动词。究其原因，作者可能对于复杂句的写作缺乏足够的训练，导致自信心不足。他想表达的意思是“特别当游客自身没有接受过良好的教育，导致他们会乱扔垃圾，并且觉得景点的清洁工会清理这些他们扔掉的垃圾”。如果用状语从句来写的话，主从句的主语应该都是“游客”，而“扔垃圾”和“认为”2个动作，只要用一个并列的连词连接，就可以成为一个并列句，这样的话，就不用担心出现2个动词的情况了：“Especially when the tourists are not educated well, they may throw rubbish everywhere and think…”通过这个分解，其实我们也能发现一种非常有效的解决方法，即将原来的句子变成并列句或者增加一个从句。
Even if the expanded number of tourists could bring about some problems, we still wantsee the positive factors of traveling industry if good management is organized. It might add to local economy. It is the reason that why a lot of governments are eager to develop traveling industry. Furthermore, tourism might also make better culture communication, improve local employment.