雅思五分作文点评

发布时间:2013-12-13 16:05:08 来源:宁波朗阁培训中心 编辑:宁波朗阁小编
  雅思写作的满分是9分,五分作文相信绝大多数考生都不会满意的,那么雅思五分作文到底犯了哪些错误才只能拿5分呢?又要如何去突破低分的...

  雅思写作的满分是9分,五分作文相信绝大多数考生都不会满意的,那么雅思五分作文到底犯了哪些错误才只能拿5分呢?又要如何去突破低分的雅思写作呢下面就对一篇雅思五分作文优缺点分析,希望大家在雅思写作上遇到低分瓶颈的同学也能突破。

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  雅思五分作文例文:
  Some people think that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills needed in the workplace. Others think that the true function of a university should be to give access to knowledge for its own sake, regardless of whether the course is useful to an employer. What, in your opinion, should be the main function of a university?
  What knowledge and skills should universities provide has been argued for many years. Some people think that the true function of universities provide knowledge for their own purpose, but nowadays, more and more people point out that universities should provide graduates with the knowledge and skills according to the workplace.
  The first reason for universities should provide these knowledge and skill is the students’ needs. Obviously, the most of the students go to university purpose of is to get some knowledge and skills which could make them have the ability to get a job. If a university does not provide these knowledge and skills, the students might not get a job and they would be very disappointed. As a result, the university would lose its students.
  Moreover, providing knowledge and skills needed in the workplace makes a university progress. The new skills and information always are initiated in the workplace, so focusing on the needs of the workplace the university could get sound strategies to do research and make it more modernization.
  Lastly, providing these knowledge and skills could benefit our country which usually gives a financial support to universities. Having these knowledge and skills, students are more easy to get a job, and this can make our countries’ economy strong.
  In conclusion, it can be said that providing the knowledge and skills which the workplace needs is every university’s basic function.
  雅思五分作文原因:
  一、这个题目中有两方的观点:some 及others的,很明显这位考生在后面的论证过程中完全忽视了others的观点,都在一味地论证some 的观点的正确性,于是考官给出的评语是:it does not address all parts of the question.
  写作建议NO.1:Do not neglect any part, or you will regret your mark.
  不要忽视任何东西,否则你的分数会让你很伤心。
  二、这位考生在连接词和复杂句型上都表现得不错,可是他太偷懒了,knowledge and skill这个词组一共用了9次,这种高频率的repetition让这位考生付出了比较惨重的代价,所以看者希望你们能够汲取这样的教训,多注意 Paraphrase的练习。尤其是常考的考试主题所可能涉及到的高频单词更是要做好homework. knowledge and skill就属于top 3 的高频考题的教育类,所以这类的词汇一定是多多准备才对,如 expertise, conversance, instruction, competence, aptitude, technique, prowess, dexterity 都可以拿来替换这两个词。
  写作建议NO.2:Paraphrase helps you parachute into a higher band.
  改写能助你拿到高分。
  通过上面的雅思五分作文优缺点的分析,可以发现上面这篇5分的雅思写作文章也并不是一无是处的,他也有自己的不错的优点——连接词也句型使用的上相当的丰富,同时也有一定的复杂度,而本篇5分雅思写作的最大败笔就是没有读懂题意,讨论的论点和内容不全,这是广大考生要在雅思写作中提起注意的地方。

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